VN - Ren'Py - Getting Intimate [Ch.2 Part B] [MangoWorks]

The game's pretty and all but it suffers from rather hard story issues really holds it back

I saw a video once and it was the South Park creators talking about what you need for a good story. They said something like "When you have a set of story beats and you can put the words “and then” in-between each one–“you’re fucked.

This games whole story is basically scenes sandwiched between "and then"'s and it really suffers as a result.

So the story is like "you go back to a place and then you meet some people and then you go to the library and meet another girl and then and then you go to a shop and meet another girl and then you go home and then a girl steals your phone and then you go to an art exhibit with some people and then you go to the beach and meet more women

Interesting but too disjointed. Like the dev doesn't want to commit too much to their own story so gives us a few random scenes with forgettable women. The renders are nice, all the girls look pretty and they're all big chested but really they feel all samey. It feels a bit like the type of game that would benefit from a menu I could call back to so I could be reminded who x or y was. The game THROWS women at you initially and some have so little screen time that when you see them again you're left wondering who they are again. On the flip side you have some characters who are interesting then disappear because all the other girls need some time.

The South Park quote goes on to state for an engaging story you need your beats to be separated by "but" or "therefore" and there are interesting beats in there.

"You have a childhood friend but she moves away but you promise to keep in touch but your mom dies therefore you lose contact but years later you see a piece of art you're sure is from her therefore you go to the teacher who ran the exhibit to ask for her help but she wants something in return"

That's an interesting story but it's buried amongst generic AVN get your dick wet fodder. Personally I feel the dev needs to strip out more than half the characters, give the remainder more screen time and actually try to engage with the player as opposed to throwing as many renders at the player as their graphics card can process in the hope one of them will stick.

It should be illegal to make the writing and story so bad when having insanely high quality renders like these. The story is just boring and the interactions are completely unrealistic. Just such a wasted opportunity

Great characters animation story ofc its not perfect but its way better than most games here MC isnt a horny dumb ass like all the others and you can chose something that other games dont let you do over all Great game the devs are onto something and thats it

Bit of a slow burn with what appears to be the main Li. There are some quality lewd scenes.
The story itself is fresh with some recycled elements. MC drops the prospect of college to work his ass off in order to care and provide treatment for his mom. Sadly she passes away after a 4 year battle with cancer.
The story really begins after that. Top tier renders. Top tier animations. The strong silent type mc who attracts females but they aren't necessarily throwing themselves at him. Based on Ch2 Part B the story is really about to pick up with the next update. I'm highly looking forward to that.

Review of [Ch.2 Part B]

I don't like to give too few stars for the sake of giving, I think that any GAME has its own potential but with this one I made an exception.

I want to make constructive criticism but it's hard for me.

My English is not very good and I play games in Spanish, but SURPRISE this one DOESN'T HAVE IT.

Even so, English is terrible from what I read... the absurd story... the girls get into your life without any sense and want to fuck you.

I really like to fuck what you can with good animations and such but this doesn't make sense, ''a girl steals your phone, takes you somewhere and sucks your cock'' just like that... NOT SENSE!

You go to the house of a MILF who is cheating on her husband but won't let you fuck her just rub his cock... it doesn't make any sense

PROS

• Good renders
• Attractive girls
• Decent animations with audio

CONS

• POOR STORY
• The sound is poor... there are parts where there is music but then for a long time there isn't... it's quite annoying
• Very forced sex scenes... too much
• Whatever you decide, your decisions have no impact on the story.

RATING :

Content: ⭐⭐
Sound: ⭐⭐
Renders: ⭐⭐⭐
Characters: ⭐
Animations: ⭐⭐⭐

Final conclusion: ⭐⭐ POOR GAME

I'm not going to say if I recommend it or not, I'll leave it to your choice...

This VN has some very clear pro's and cons and that makes this VN average. The renders are very good, the women look sexy and the MC looks good to. Animation of the seks scenes are good as well. So just based on the visuals I would have given it 5 stars.

The story is fine but not great. It is a little hard to follow in some occasion, and it creates problems that are very farfetched and ignores sometimes some very Obvious solutions just to push the story in a certain direction. In general there are a lot of situations wich turns sexual unrealisticly, but this is a porn game so that is to be expected and it doesn't bother me.

The biggest problem for me is the MC. He is not a very likable character. He act like he is some holier than jesus character, but ignores that he himself is doing similar things to what he judges others for. For exemple he judges one guy for being lazy for not getting a job, while he is not even looking for a job himself at that point. He judges this girl that she did sexual things with him the first time they met, ignoring that he himself is doing the exact same thing (at least in my playtrough). This is a game breaker issue for me, if the MC is not likable than the VN becomes unplayable. I still give it 3 stars because it is clear that the developer is good at the Visuals of it all, but the story needs a serius redo.

Well. You had many work to rebuilt. However, I stand still. Nice story. A little "blindness" for the MC... Of course, Daphne is gorgeous and remembered about all. She's just standing there and wanting to be certain for his feelings... Also, Melinda and Cassandra, are top "notch". Waiting for the development of that sensitive love story.

This game is still new but we can get a glimpse of how the story will unfold and imo it's really nice. The visuals are nice, the characters are likable and realistic. They used a very common model to play the MC which is a bit disappointing. It is the same guy as in many other avns.

The Pros:

Melinda and Valerie are great love interests. I like them older so... Melinda has the edge for my heart. The renders and vibrant colors are beautiful.

I really enjoyed being a MC from humble beginnings. He's not spoiled, entitled and most importantly he's not a idiotic loser. He knows when to stand up for himself and for people around him. He also has a moral compass. Seeing him work his self to the bone to take care of his dying mother garnered my respect.

The other ladies we meet aren't bad, you're not shoehorned into relationships with them. I even like that the content with the overly cliche bro character can be skipped as well.

The Cons:

Make sure that the choices aren't just for show. Not saying that it's a big deal but it happens in VNs.


I'm glad I found this bad boy. There's a lot more positives than negatives so let's keep this one from getting abandoned.

Wow! This game is really very beautiful and high quality!
I would call it something like a life story, where in reality some people have a past. truly a rare gem.

Renders are really inspiring, Mc also looks like a completely grown up guy who is looking for his path and wants to get his past back. and also around the story there are a lot of beautiful girls and hot women's!

Story: slowly developing. But, very smoothly and with a little intrigue!

Plot: calm and at the same time there are a lot of secrets on the part of some girls.

Animations: new game, and the animations look like quality, truly amazing work!

Girls: There are many different girls, such as milfs, such as hot girls, as well as rich women and their development

The interactions and conversations are completely removed from reality. This feels as though it is AI written. The "setup" for sexual encounters are all absurd. On top of that a lot of the language used makes zero sense. For instance "I have to clean the bathroom or the fish will have my bones for dinner". WHAT? The story is quite basic and largely propelled by the characters acting in an idiotic fashion. The only reason I am giving this 2 stars is the renders are quite good, but that is basically all this has going for it.

I'd say this is average if you want to see naked women and easy sex, and more on the bad side if you want a good story with likeable and interesting characters. This VN is full of cliches and all the sex scenes so far are very unreal; feel so fake and porn-like. Most girls are nymphomaniacs who want to fuck MC just because he is good looking. I understand the dev might not want to offer a realistic experience but damn, when all you gotta do to have sex is exist, it feels pretty pointless and 0 satisfying. Also, I feel like somehow, most girls look the same. As if the same original model was used for most of them, just with some alterations. The MC is also pretty boring and plain, like an emo all the time. I get that he has had a difficult life and all but damn, you can be sad and miserable and still charismatic and interesting (e.g MC from Artemis). I find most interactions and convos super generic, almost robot-like and not interesting at all, but that might just be me.

There are many situations that are just so silly. The boyfriend of a girl looking for a fight after almost running over the MC with his car: "my girlfriend looked at you strangely yesterday. Who are you!?". Even if you ended things in 'good terms' with her at the boutique. Or he almost having an attack at the art exhibition and instead of checking the details of the painting and the author or looking for the artist in the exhibition, he goes to the super sexy teacher who of course, agrees to help him in exchange for sex hahahah ahhhhhhhh!!! Seriously, it feels like the only sexual experience the devs of 99% of VNs have is porn.

Valerie is the best girl, just wanted to get that out of my system.

Story:

A more realistic kind of story to follow. Plenty of weigh on the MC's shoulders, he lost his mother, worked countless jobs to try and care for her while missing out on others things people tend to take for granted. He reunites with his childhood friends and her mom all while trying to find his first love, Lilly.

I enjoyed this a lot. Likable characters all around and the perfect balance of steamy content. Again, Valerie stole my heart, then there's bombshells like Melinda and Cassandra.(Normally don't care for cheating scenarios but what hell) The dialogue was sour a few times but overall I can't complain. The characters aren't annoying and most of them seem well written as of Chapter 2. This is a one of those stories that seem to get it right and makes you want to follow along.

Renders:

Great.

Animations:
Well done. The Assjob by Cassandra was so hot.

Dialogue:
Good.

Characters:

I mean... there's a lot of ass...
Not a bad thing at all.

Overall:

This Devs deserves way more support than this. Empty out your pockets like you've most likely emptied your balls while playing this.

What the hell? This game is a banger! The description for this game sounded pretty generic ngl, but the good dialogue, renders, and unique characters definitely kept me hooked and the few lewd scenes and animations that are there are wonderful. I do wish though there's more sound effects and music added though. Overall, this is probably a contender for best new game of the year for me unless I missed something.

So far, a ~2 hour experience as of Ch.2 Part A with hopefully future updates taking a reasonable amount of time. Keep up the good work Mango!

Probably more in the 4 star range so far, but its well polished.

The first chapter introduces all but one of the main LI, for the most part the characters are well written and have distinct voices. The Beth and Erica characters are practically identical outside of model differences though. Could use more dialogue in general.

I hope the developer does not add more characters.. there are already 7 or 8 LI introduced in the first chapter which is a tall order to build paths for.

wow.... fantastic writing/every character is wonderful. Left wanting more and more, actually read each line instead of scanning through like most VN's. Renders are high quality...only one chapter in...if I had to choose one dev to support and want to see through the end, it'd be these guys.

This is a good game, the only real gripe I have with the game is the variance in how dialogue is delivered, and I think it's because the first language of the dev is not English, if that is not the case I am sorry. The message and meaning of the words are delivered, but the way they say it is, roundabout would be the best way to describe it. They don't talk like how people would actually talk to each other.

Obviously English is a weird weird language and very difficult to learn, so the dev is doing a great job of delivering a good story, good characters, and great models, I just think if the dialogue can be touched up it can be a true five-star game.

I'm giving this 4 stars, but with a lot of caveats. I think this only deserves 3-stars as it is, but since it's still too early, I think we can cut the dev some lack. That said, here's my review:

Great renders and nothing too offensive to put you off, but it doesn't have a lot going for it. There is a plot, which I honestly think could be great, but it has barely advanced, it mostly focuses on slice of life things, which is completely fine, but there has to be some hook and the characters aren't it.

First, the MC has a strong backstory and it kind of shows, so props for that, but for some strange reason, he seems to stutter at every corner and sometimes he's just straight up confident. I'd suggest just sticking with the confident MC since it fits his backstory of being a reliable dude that's been there for those who need him.

We haven't seen much of the LIs, so it's too early to judge but they're too bland so far, except for Beth, however, the whole scenario with Beth was just straight up incomprehensible. It just doesn't make sense and I honestly didn't want to continue putting up with that scenario so I simply rejected her at first. I went back and played her scene before I made this review and unfortunately, it didn't get better.

It's fine to not reveal everything at the start, but you gotta give the player some reason to say "yes, I wanna see what's up with this girl" other than literally just for the sake of watching the scene.

The scene with Beth could've been a lot more interesting if we had more choices, like, I would've liked the chance to just straight up leave and force Beth to stop being such a weirdo. The dialogue could've been longer, too, we could've been given the option to ask her questions as well and not have it feel like Beth is interrogating us.


That said, the whole cast has potential to interact in meaningful ways and spice things up, in my opinion and the main plot is interesting. I think what would help this the most is more conflict and more choices. I always appreciate the ability to decide what the hell the MC will do or how he will react.

Overall a solid VN. Pulls off the everyday lifestyle setting well with a good plot.

Pros:
1) Great renders. The girls aren't DAZ copy paste characters, which is beyond refreshing.
2) Great writing. The plot has a believable story and is interesting at the same time.
3) Most of the girls have personalities and depth to them.
4) MC isn't a fresh 18yo creep.

Cons:
1) Some of the girl's storylines are too predictable. But let's see how the plot develops.

I'm usually very critical in my approach to the games and kinetic novels that appear here.
It's really nice to find an exception to the rule.
But I'll make a disclaimer right away - I have difficulty with definitions. It's not really a game and it's not really a kinetic novel.
The plot (with all the disclaimers in relation to porn) is a 10 out of 10.
Graphics - 10 out of 10.
Character development - 8 out of 10.
And it should be said at once - fans of porn and only porn will be disappointed.
But a normal mature person will find this story interesting. After all, both erotica and porn - these are variants of urban fantasy, in the world of which is so nice to dive into at the end of a hard day's work, to distract from problems and worries. Nota Bene: I don't mean to say that the world of the game has a place for the supernatural, no, it's our everyday world.
And in conclusion I would like to wish the developers success in their work on this project. Good luck in all your creative endeavors!