VN Ren'Py Domino Beach [Ep.2 Fix] [Mr Jet]

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Paynne

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Hey everyone!

Sorry for being out of touch for so long. February wasn't the best month for me. I don't want this to sound like excuses or complaints, but life happened. First, I took a week off after releasing Episode 2, and then I got sick. Nothing serious, just a regular cold, but I felt weak for about a week afterward and had to really force myself to get back to work. Then my entire family got sick too. So yeah, loving this spring season.

Anyway, let's talk about the game. First, regarding Episode 2 - I've read many reviews, both positive and quite critical. I actually agree with some of the criticism. Some of my story choices were controversial. The characters are diverse, and some might have seemed a bit cartoonish. I did want to portray them as antagonists, but perhaps I went a bit overboard in some aspects. Still, this is just the beginning of the story, so things will balance out in the future. At least I hope so. Some people also complained about the large cast of characters. I think that's fair, but there's not much I can do about it now. In my defense, I'm not planning to introduce many new characters and will focus on developing the existing ones, with very rare exceptions.

I've also slightly adjusted my vision for Episode 3 and the game as a whole. Nothing dramatic that would change my overall concept, but I always try to listen to reasonable criticism. So I've definitely drawn some conclusions.

Now, about Episode 3 - I've completely written it. All scenes, dialogues, and everything else (except maybe the epilogue). I can tell you that the third episode will have significantly more lewd scenes. It will be lighter in atmosphere and generally more rewarding for the MC. In terms of length, if nothing changes, the episode will be approximately the same as the first two. I've also been busy creating new locations, modifying old ones, plus some items, models, etc.

I started working on the renders about a week ago. Not much is ready yet, only 45 renders, but progress is steady. I'll try to share updates more frequently in the near future.

Thanks for your support, and take care!
 

Amansas

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guys how's the writing in this one? The one complaint I had in the otherwise perfect previous game from this dev was the dialog writing cuz no one irl speaks like that. Hopefully that has improved?
 
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The unseen

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guys how's the writing in this one? The one complaint I had in the otherwise perfect previous game from this dev was the dialog writing cuz no one irl speaks like that. Hopefully that has improved?
It's too early to tell but render quality has improved as fuck.
 

Amansas

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Apr 17, 2018
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It's too early to tell but render quality has improved as fuck.
I noticed, yeah. I was talking about the dialog writing rather than the overall plot writing. Does it feel natural, like, things everyday people would say? I remember in the previous game, I kept going "No one talks like that in real life!!" cuz they used such absurd words some times :'(

I still would, idk about you :WaitWhat:
 

Gerold1957

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Hey everyone!

Sorry for being out of touch for so long. February wasn't the best month for me. I don't want this to sound like excuses or complaints, but life happened. First, I took a week off after releasing Episode 2, and then I got sick. Nothing serious, just a regular cold, but I felt weak for about a week afterward and had to really force myself to get back to work. Then my entire family got sick too. So yeah, loving this spring season.

Anyway, let's talk about the game. First, regarding Episode 2 - I've read many reviews, both positive and quite critical. I actually agree with some of the criticism. Some of my story choices were controversial. The characters are diverse, and some might have seemed a bit cartoonish. I did want to portray them as antagonists, but perhaps I went a bit overboard in some aspects. Still, this is just the beginning of the story, so things will balance out in the future. At least I hope so. Some people also complained about the large cast of characters. I think that's fair, but there's not much I can do about it now. In my defense, I'm not planning to introduce many new characters and will focus on developing the existing ones, with very rare exceptions.

I've also slightly adjusted my vision for Episode 3 and the game as a whole. Nothing dramatic that would change my overall concept, but I always try to listen to reasonable criticism. So I've definitely drawn some conclusions.

Now, about Episode 3 - I've completely written it. All scenes, dialogues, and everything else (except maybe the epilogue). I can tell you that the third episode will have significantly more lewd scenes. It will be lighter in atmosphere and generally more rewarding for the MC. In terms of length, if nothing changes, the episode will be approximately the same as the first two. I've also been busy creating new locations, modifying old ones, plus some items, models, etc.

I started working on the renders about a week ago. Not much is ready yet, only 45 renders, but progress is steady. I'll try to share updates more frequently in the near future.

Thanks for your support, and take care!
Hi, can i ask you when the Episode 3 is released or how log does it thanks ???? I loved the game very well !!
 

Simpgor

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guys how's the writing in this one? The one complaint I had in the otherwise perfect previous game from this dev was the dialog writing cuz no one irl speaks like that. Hopefully that has improved?
I just started and uh..... kind of but not really? The words themselves that people use are more or less normal but the "flow" is off and everything (so far) does not feel natural, but that starts to get into more story (writing issues) rather than just dialog

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granted i couldnt get very far into the last game for similar reasons and would not have started this one if i recognized the name :HideThePain:
 

MrJet

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I just started and uh..... kind of but not really? The words themselves that people use are more or less normal but the "flow" is off and everything (so far) does not feel natural, but that starts to get into more story (writing issues) rather than just dialog

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granted i couldnt get very far into the last game for similar reasons and would not have started this one if i recognized the name :HideThePain:
Okay, maybe I shouldn't jump into this conversation since I don't really like arguing and all. But I'm genuinely curious here. What's wrong with these examples? Honestly, I don't understand.

What's the problem with MC taking on the role of a white knight and trying to stand up for a colleague? Is it bad? Oh no, a man stood up for a woman he doesn't know well. How terrible! This never happens in normal stories, right? And he doesn't have his own place to live. So that means he should keep quiet? Is that the logic? And what's with the criticism about having two bags of belongings? When I was 20, that's all I had too. As I imagine many guys that age do.

The conversation example is a bit more complex. I admit I'm not a native English speaker, so maybe I'm missing something. Of course, the example given is significantly simplified, but here's the full version:
lu "Mom says you're living the dream. That you finally escaped our backwater and found your place."
lu "But Dad's a whole different story. Keeps muttering that you'll be back any day now. Thinks the big city's too much for you."
mc "(As if he ever believed in me.)"
lu "Don't listen to him. A couple more years, and I'll be right there with you, showing this city what we're made of. We've always had each other's backs, remember?"
mc "Of course I remember. We're a team! You and me against the world."
mc "(I forgot how much I missed this little troublemaker.)"
mc "I miss you, sis. This city wouldn't be so lonely if you were here. Every adventure's more fun with you around."
lu "Don't worry. I'll be there soon. Hang in there till then. I believe in you."
lu "Everything's good with you, right? Mom's really worried, you know."
mc "I won't lie, Lucy, it's not easy. But I'll find my way, I promise."

Yes, maybe there should have been some kind of pause before "Everything's good with you, right? Mom's really worried, you know." But is it really that unnatural?

I won't deny I have plenty of issues with story construction, characters, etc. But these specific examples... I don't know. Is this criticism just for the sake of criticism, or am I really missing something? I'm asking because I'm genuinely interested. I always try to improve my understanding of how to write a story.
 

SamualHand

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I just started and uh..... kind of but not really? The words themselves that people use are more or less normal but the "flow" is off and everything (so far) does not feel natural, but that starts to get into more story (writing issues) rather than just dialog
You need to increase the level of porn logic you apply, until it makes sense.
For me everything is perfect, althought I know you are right.
 
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Maviarab

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Okay, maybe I shouldn't jump into this conversation since I don't really like arguing and all. But I'm genuinely curious here. What's wrong with these examples? Honestly, I don't understand.

What's the problem with MC taking on the role of a white knight and trying to stand up for a colleague? Is it bad? Oh no, a man stood up for a woman he doesn't know well. How terrible! This never happens in normal stories, right? And he doesn't have his own place to live. So that means he should keep quiet? Is that the logic? And what's with the criticism about having two bags of belongings? When I was 20, that's all I had too. As I imagine many guys that age do.

The conversation example is a bit more complex. I admit I'm not a native English speaker, so maybe I'm missing something. Of course, the example given is significantly simplified, but here's the full version:
lu "Mom says you're living the dream. That you finally escaped our backwater and found your place."
lu "But Dad's a whole different story. Keeps muttering that you'll be back any day now. Thinks the big city's too much for you."
mc "(As if he ever believed in me.)"
lu "Don't listen to him. A couple more years, and I'll be right there with you, showing this city what we're made of. We've always had each other's backs, remember?"
mc "Of course I remember. We're a team! You and me against the world."
mc "(I forgot how much I missed this little troublemaker.)"
mc "I miss you, sis. This city wouldn't be so lonely if you were here. Every adventure's more fun with you around."
lu "Don't worry. I'll be there soon. Hang in there till then. I believe in you."
lu "Everything's good with you, right? Mom's really worried, you know."
mc "I won't lie, Lucy, it's not easy. But I'll find my way, I promise."

Yes, maybe there should have been some kind of pause before "Everything's good with you, right? Mom's really worried, you know." But is it really that unnatural?

I won't deny I have plenty of issues with story construction, characters, etc. But these specific examples... I don't know. Is this criticism just for the sake of criticism, or am I really missing something? I'm asking because I'm genuinely interested. I always try to improve my understanding of how to write a story.
Some folk..especially trolls...will whine about anything.

As you're here though, is there an explanation for half the girls wearing engagement/wedding rings? (even if they are not, they are on that finger, not something normally done even if a woman loves jewellry).

I'm just curious, not an important thing at all but it caught my eye.
 

SamualHand

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As you're here though, is there an explanation for half the girls wearing engagement/wedding rings? (even if they are not, they are on that finger, not something normally done even if a woman loves jewellry).
Maybe this point of view is a cultural thing? I would have no idea if a women is wearing a wedding ring....
Call me dumb, it never appears to me as important.
 
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