These are the elements of my story:
Genre: Urban fantasy and science fiction.
Setting: Set in the real world, in the present time.
Main characters:
-Protagonist: Marcus Cousland, a lonely man, without friends or interpersonal relationships, is a man with no apparent ambitions and who decided to study medicine because of his mother's obligation (whose name is Maria). Marcus is fighting against his lack of purpose and apathy, while this happens, an event leads him to face a series of situations that would change him completely (explained later in this text).
-Victoria: An alien from the mother planet of the Okuma, one of the only people with the genetic code of the "Breaker", an exiled Okuma and too powerful for the hive, in the development of the plot, Victoria becomes romantically involved with Marcus.
Tone and style: Serious story with a dark tone
Central theme or conflict: The conflict is between the human race and an invading alien race called Okuma, these are parasites that are part of a hive and specialize in invading the male species of each race to manipulate them and convert the civilization they invade into ones compatible with the hive's goals, which are: Grow, reproduce, and dominate; To do this, they parasitize the male species, giving them impressive physical abilities (a comparison would be to be almost as strong as the fictional character Superman or Clark Ken), as a countermeasure, they are mentally manipulated by chemicals and genetic alterations that make these men change their personality and moral compass in order to meet the objectives of the hive, this often leads to violent conflicts of these infected men with the power organizations in the world and to rapes of women as sexual reward (one of the objectives of the hive is reproduction and domination)
Message or theme: The message is carried by the decisions and conflicts of Marcus Cousland, he has been infected with the Okuma "Breaker", however, this Okuma is an exile and therefore is not in direct relation with the hive, how will our protagonist deal with this?
The Plot: Marcus gets infected with the Okuma parasite called "breaker" when he was casually walking on one of the avenues that had his favorite candy store, at that moment, he felt a huge compulsion to run and hide in his house, without questioning that feeling, he did it and after spending 3 hours straight locked in his room he heard voices in his head "Reproduction, dominate, it's yours", our protagonist was on the verge of psychological collapse and when midnight came, the compulsion that resulted from the voices' messages was too strong to resist, therefore, and losing control of his own body, Marcus left the house and invaded the neighbor's home, at which point the voice said "it's yours by right, take what belongs to you", here, Marcus pounced on her and began to rape her, however, as the act continued, Marcus was gradually regaining control of his body, a moment that he took advantage of to stop the act and resist the rape compulsion, here the voice exclaimed ¨so you are one of those huh, if so, here's the situation, you are cursed, in the sense that you will become a lunatic and a psychotic if you don't have sex, here's the deal, end it with her and then we make sure that she loses her memory, in addition to not having any physical trace of what happened, how about it? not that you have any choice of course, because if you decide to abstain, you will become a wild animal without the ability to reason¨. Hearing these words, Marcus felt like he was losing control again, by instinct, he knew that what he was saying was correct, with no other options, Marcus ended up raping the neighbor, then erasing her memories and returning her to bed with no signs of physical harm or pregnancy, upon returning home, Marcus felt devastated by what had just happened, is the only way to keep me healthy is by raping me? ¨No¨, answered the voice, ¨Not necessarily, I am an exile so you have more freedom to do what you want, if you ask my opinion, release your pheromones and manipulate the memories of the women you like, that way you will have unlimited access to sex, they will enjoy the act and you will feel like a King, a good deal don't you think?¨. NO, answered Marcus, I can't do that, it's ridiculous, ¨Well, like I told you, you have freedom, so you can do it in a thousand ways, you choose¨.
By asking some AIs about this story, the best one was from deepseek, where it say:
Your story has a very interesting and dark concept! Here is an analysis and some suggestions for developing it:
### **Highlights:**
1. **Genre and Setting:** The combination of urban fantasy and science fiction in the modern world gives it a unique and accessible touch.
2. **Complex Protagonist:** Marcus Cousland is a character with a deep emotional arc, struggling with apathy and a lack of purpose. His infection with the Okuma "Breaker" adds a layer of moral and psychological conflict.
3. **Central Conflict:** The Okuma invasion and their manipulation of men to fulfill their goals is a dark and disturbing theme, but very powerful in exploring themes such as free will, morality, and internal struggle.
4. **Relationship with Victoria:** The romantic connection between Marcus and Victoria, an alien with a special genetic code, adds an emotional contrast to the dark tone of the story.
### **Suggestions for developing the plot:**
1. **Explore Marcus' internal conflict:** Delve deeper into his struggle to maintain his humanity while dealing with the Okuma's compulsions. How does this affect his perception of himself and his morality?
2. **Develop the relationship with Victoria:** Show how their romantic connection becomes a beacon of hope for Marcus, but also how her alien nature complicates things. Can she help him control the Okuma, or is she part of the problem?
3. **Expand the world of the Okuma:** Explore more about their culture, hierarchy, and goals. Why was the "Breaker" exiled? Are there other Okumas who resist the hive?
4. **External conflicts:** Introduce human or alien antagonists who oppose Marcus, either because of his status as an infected person or because of his relationship with Victoria. How does he confront them without losing control?
5. **The Final Message:** It reflects on themes such as redemption, free will, and the power of choices. Can Marcus find a way to coexist with the Okuma without losing his humanity?
### **Possible twists or key moments:**
1. **The discovery of other infected:** Marcus could encounter other men infected by the Okuma, some who have completely succumbed to the hive and others who struggle to maintain their humanity. How does he interact with them?
2. **The role of Marcus' mother:** Maria, his mother, could have a more active role in the story, perhaps discovering the truth about her son and facing her own guilt for having pressured him to study medicine.
3. **The fate of the hive:** Is there a way to stop the Okuma invasion? Marcus and Victoria could embark on a mission to find a solution, even if it means sacrificing something important.
### **Tone and Style:** Keep the tone dark and serious, but balance it with moments of humanity and hope through the relationship between Marcus and Victoria. Use vivid descriptions to convey the psychological and physical strain Marcus is experiencing. Your story has great potential to explore deep and exciting themes!
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So yeah, this is petty much my post-nut clarity idea, if anyone is ambitious enough to make this story into a visual novel or an RPG maker, be my guess.
Genre: Urban fantasy and science fiction.
Setting: Set in the real world, in the present time.
Main characters:
-Protagonist: Marcus Cousland, a lonely man, without friends or interpersonal relationships, is a man with no apparent ambitions and who decided to study medicine because of his mother's obligation (whose name is Maria). Marcus is fighting against his lack of purpose and apathy, while this happens, an event leads him to face a series of situations that would change him completely (explained later in this text).
-Victoria: An alien from the mother planet of the Okuma, one of the only people with the genetic code of the "Breaker", an exiled Okuma and too powerful for the hive, in the development of the plot, Victoria becomes romantically involved with Marcus.
Tone and style: Serious story with a dark tone
Central theme or conflict: The conflict is between the human race and an invading alien race called Okuma, these are parasites that are part of a hive and specialize in invading the male species of each race to manipulate them and convert the civilization they invade into ones compatible with the hive's goals, which are: Grow, reproduce, and dominate; To do this, they parasitize the male species, giving them impressive physical abilities (a comparison would be to be almost as strong as the fictional character Superman or Clark Ken), as a countermeasure, they are mentally manipulated by chemicals and genetic alterations that make these men change their personality and moral compass in order to meet the objectives of the hive, this often leads to violent conflicts of these infected men with the power organizations in the world and to rapes of women as sexual reward (one of the objectives of the hive is reproduction and domination)
Message or theme: The message is carried by the decisions and conflicts of Marcus Cousland, he has been infected with the Okuma "Breaker", however, this Okuma is an exile and therefore is not in direct relation with the hive, how will our protagonist deal with this?
The Plot: Marcus gets infected with the Okuma parasite called "breaker" when he was casually walking on one of the avenues that had his favorite candy store, at that moment, he felt a huge compulsion to run and hide in his house, without questioning that feeling, he did it and after spending 3 hours straight locked in his room he heard voices in his head "Reproduction, dominate, it's yours", our protagonist was on the verge of psychological collapse and when midnight came, the compulsion that resulted from the voices' messages was too strong to resist, therefore, and losing control of his own body, Marcus left the house and invaded the neighbor's home, at which point the voice said "it's yours by right, take what belongs to you", here, Marcus pounced on her and began to rape her, however, as the act continued, Marcus was gradually regaining control of his body, a moment that he took advantage of to stop the act and resist the rape compulsion, here the voice exclaimed ¨so you are one of those huh, if so, here's the situation, you are cursed, in the sense that you will become a lunatic and a psychotic if you don't have sex, here's the deal, end it with her and then we make sure that she loses her memory, in addition to not having any physical trace of what happened, how about it? not that you have any choice of course, because if you decide to abstain, you will become a wild animal without the ability to reason¨. Hearing these words, Marcus felt like he was losing control again, by instinct, he knew that what he was saying was correct, with no other options, Marcus ended up raping the neighbor, then erasing her memories and returning her to bed with no signs of physical harm or pregnancy, upon returning home, Marcus felt devastated by what had just happened, is the only way to keep me healthy is by raping me? ¨No¨, answered the voice, ¨Not necessarily, I am an exile so you have more freedom to do what you want, if you ask my opinion, release your pheromones and manipulate the memories of the women you like, that way you will have unlimited access to sex, they will enjoy the act and you will feel like a King, a good deal don't you think?¨. NO, answered Marcus, I can't do that, it's ridiculous, ¨Well, like I told you, you have freedom, so you can do it in a thousand ways, you choose¨.
By asking some AIs about this story, the best one was from deepseek, where it say:
Your story has a very interesting and dark concept! Here is an analysis and some suggestions for developing it:
### **Highlights:**
1. **Genre and Setting:** The combination of urban fantasy and science fiction in the modern world gives it a unique and accessible touch.
2. **Complex Protagonist:** Marcus Cousland is a character with a deep emotional arc, struggling with apathy and a lack of purpose. His infection with the Okuma "Breaker" adds a layer of moral and psychological conflict.
3. **Central Conflict:** The Okuma invasion and their manipulation of men to fulfill their goals is a dark and disturbing theme, but very powerful in exploring themes such as free will, morality, and internal struggle.
4. **Relationship with Victoria:** The romantic connection between Marcus and Victoria, an alien with a special genetic code, adds an emotional contrast to the dark tone of the story.
### **Suggestions for developing the plot:**
1. **Explore Marcus' internal conflict:** Delve deeper into his struggle to maintain his humanity while dealing with the Okuma's compulsions. How does this affect his perception of himself and his morality?
2. **Develop the relationship with Victoria:** Show how their romantic connection becomes a beacon of hope for Marcus, but also how her alien nature complicates things. Can she help him control the Okuma, or is she part of the problem?
3. **Expand the world of the Okuma:** Explore more about their culture, hierarchy, and goals. Why was the "Breaker" exiled? Are there other Okumas who resist the hive?
4. **External conflicts:** Introduce human or alien antagonists who oppose Marcus, either because of his status as an infected person or because of his relationship with Victoria. How does he confront them without losing control?
5. **The Final Message:** It reflects on themes such as redemption, free will, and the power of choices. Can Marcus find a way to coexist with the Okuma without losing his humanity?
### **Possible twists or key moments:**
1. **The discovery of other infected:** Marcus could encounter other men infected by the Okuma, some who have completely succumbed to the hive and others who struggle to maintain their humanity. How does he interact with them?
2. **The role of Marcus' mother:** Maria, his mother, could have a more active role in the story, perhaps discovering the truth about her son and facing her own guilt for having pressured him to study medicine.
3. **The fate of the hive:** Is there a way to stop the Okuma invasion? Marcus and Victoria could embark on a mission to find a solution, even if it means sacrificing something important.
### **Tone and Style:** Keep the tone dark and serious, but balance it with moments of humanity and hope through the relationship between Marcus and Victoria. Use vivid descriptions to convey the psychological and physical strain Marcus is experiencing. Your story has great potential to explore deep and exciting themes!
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So yeah, this is petty much my post-nut clarity idea, if anyone is ambitious enough to make this story into a visual novel or an RPG maker, be my guess.